I will tell you what is a normal day in my life, normally I wake up at 6:30 and my dad gives me my clothes for school. Wait I haven't talk about me, I am a person who likes to be organized, I am serious, sometimes I'm sad or mad, but most of the time I am happy. The way of my thinking is that "You only live once", so I'm always happy and love to give hugs, because hugs makes me so happy and I think if I give someone a hug they will feel the same. But not the kind of YOLO (you only live once ) to make stupid stuff and don't care if that stupid thing may kill you.
The next thing on my day is going for breakfast, most of the times I eat quesadillas, eggs or a sandwich. Then I go to school and all the fun and leaving stuff starts. I am in a class room with ten guys, including me. In spanish we would say "el salon es un desmadre", meaning that the class room is a chaos. I have a good time with this guys, they make me laugh and the main reason is a chaos is that there are no girls on our class room. If there were girls, maybe we will be more civilized to try to impress the girls.
In a summery my day is full of fun, laugh's and learning new things. Then I practice basketball from 3 to 5:30. If it is Monday or Wednesday I go to Robotics workshop to work, I go there since 4 and finish at 6. Then the fun thing comes when I get to my house, HOMEWORK!!! Believe me is the funniest thing in the world, I was being sarcastic. Is the awful lest thing in the whole world, instead of having a good time watching TV and remembering the stupid stuff my class mates made, I need to do the homework. Is the horrible problem that I have every day.
Today the 12 of November of 2015, they pinch my eye at basketball and it hearts a lot. So then imagine having my red eye, with little blood inside and trying to finish the wonderful homework, became on the most terrible problem i had in the day. But I am okey, thanks God and I hope that he still send me blessing because thanks to him it was only a little scratch inside my eye.
I hope you enjoy this pice of writing and that you learn new thing of how my day is
1. Check tenses
ResponderEliminar2. Describe more your days, on the introduction you described more how you are
3. school and all the change to school where all the...
4. use italics when a word isn't in english to make the reader know
5. our class room; if there
6. Grammar!!!!
7. You need to talk only for one day, it's one day in your life; focuse in only one day
8. You need to talk more generall on your days, like what happens every Monday, you don't het your eye poked that often or do you?
9. Conclusion left me insatisfied with the essay